Looking for someone to critique

[Tomolan]

A few months ago, I finished an e-Book called "Rusted Remains" and made it available on Amazon (for .99 Cents).
So far, I have had a few opportunistic buyers but no one is or has critiqued it.

Here?s the deal, If you are interested in doing a write up (here, a high-traffic blog or on Amazon) I?ll send you the book for free. Catch is I need something that attracts readers.

Anyone interested?

Let me know
Mick Sylvestre

[Jennifer P]

So...you're offering a free copy in return for a review that has to be positive...

[Jaqhama]

Jennifer has a point.
Plus I started to read the first free chapters on Amazon and straight away realised you need a good editor to correct your grammar and spelling.
Might I suggest joining a writing forum and offering up the first couple of chapters for critique.
People on writing forums are there to improve, or help others, improve their writing skills.
Nothing wrong with the actual story, per se, but the sentence structure and grammar needs some work.

Cheers: Jaq